Bar Scene Blogfest
This one is hosted by Tara, at t-fouts. I pulled the scene out of my first WiP, Driven. One day I plan on getting back to it. One day. The entire WiP has since been rewritten all in 1st pov (Chloe). This has fun pov jumping and tense jumping. What can I say, it was my first draft of my first novel...
This scene is about 800 words, kinda long - sorry, and comes on the heels of this one. There's also a little background in that link, as well.
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This scene is about 800 words, kinda long - sorry, and comes on the heels of this one. There's also a little background in that link, as well.
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Comments
Especially the fact that it's written very convincingly from a man's point of view. Nice flow and good mix of internal dialogue and dialogue.
Great job.
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Hope things are going okay this weekend.
I liked the ending here, too. Poor guy. He's been in love with her since they were kids - but he gets his kiss eventually ;)
Lola - I know, I plan to. Just have to get in here and post the link and blog about it, then I'll be over. Maybe tomorrow if I can get my head into it. Thanks.
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Have an unusually fun week, Roland
Totally hooked me. They are both playing with fire here...I hope something comes from this!
Also like the whole racecar aspect of it. Vroom!
More please!
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Guinevere - Thanks. You signed up, but didn't do one. I missed it.
Alyson - Thanks, on both counts.
CTW (is this Courtney?) - Glad you liked it. Similar, eh ;)
Iapetus - I hadn't seen the Kiss one, or I would have doubled this up ;) Yep, it's a whole book about racing.
Raquel - Thanks, I felt for him, too. He's got a bad rep in the town, but he's really not a bad guy.
Roland - Thanks. His bubble gets blown back up and not burst soon.
Amalia - These two both get hot and bothered thinking about the other racing.
Shelley - Thanks. I'm hoping the male pov works: I'm thinking of going back to using both for this eventually.
Alex - Well, both were already written scenes, so I kinda cheated ;)
Seriously, that's a great way to end the scene. Perfect.
Cat
Allit. - Thanks, much appreciated :)
I loved this line! And I also loved how the entire scene unfolded. Great job!
And I didn't feel like this scene was too long either, so no worries about word count.
"Forever, it seemed, he'd been wanting to rescue that plump bottom lip from those teeth--with his tongue."
Good job!